Azamat+Essay+Feedback

Azamat this is a good start, though I feel like you're still missing something. For example your attention grabber shows both the positive and the negative. But your connection focuses only the negative. What about the man who does feel empathy in the movie, what allows him to care for other people? I feel like if you consider this it will lead you to a stronger thesis. Right now I see you have an idea about familiarity but I think it needs to be clearer. It has to do with the idea that if we do not understand others then where how do we fill this gap? What is the problem with relying on society (family, school, history and media) to give us information about others that we do not know ourselves?


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