Bosco+Essay+Feedback

Bosco you have some good ideas but you need more. Your attention grabber is very interesting, but you need to use it to lead to a connection. What is an example of a song/movie/newspaper article of someone getting into a fight because of what they say? There are many examples of this, you just have to pick one you know and write about it. This will lead you to a clear thesis about why these words have this power, which you are also missing. You cannot pass this essay without a clear thesis.


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