second+draft

First thesis: I think people are not so empathetic because they don't even try to understand.

Why?(Why they don't try) I think people are not so empathetic because they don't even try to understand other people's feelings because they think that others don't have any sense for them.

Why?(Why they think that other people don't have any sense for them?) I think people are not empathetic because they don't even try to understand other people's feelings because they think that others don't have any sense for them,even they will be dead,they don't care and don't consider that we are the world and should care for them.Only this way can follow people to peace.

Second draft: We always want to be supported and want people to understand us.But do we always understand others?No,we don't and that is why other people don't show there empathy for us.Consider the movie"Hotel Rwanda".The movie shows us how people can be cruel and kill innocent people just for nothing.They killed people without any empathy because they don't know them.They thought that it was fine to kill unfamiliar people.But did they thought that people whom they killed were someone's mothers or brothers?What would they feel,if it were their mothers and brothers?This is the problem.People became cruel because they could be empathetic only their familiar persons and stopped considering feelings of others.