Ivan+Essay+Feedback

Ivan you have a good attention grabber but you need more. You need a connection, and since you do not have one your thoughts lack any focus. Does singing/rapping with the word nigger mean we have forgotten racism? Many people argue about this, in fact you could find many newspaper article about this topic. FInd one and see if you agree or disagree and explain why, then you will have a strong connection and thesis.


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