Carl+Essay+feedback

This is a great start Carl. Your attention grabber is very thought provoking. All you need to do is have a tutor check your grammar. Your connection is good but not specific enough. How was language used by Jake. Specifically what kind of language did he use in his final speech, what did the language do to the jury? How did it do the impossible? By looking closer at this example you should be able to come up with a stronger thesis. Do not be distracted by TKMB, save everything about the book for your body. Instead look more at Jake and see if you can find out how language is able to change people.


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